The profile of Dr. Jacob Rubinstein, Professor of Mathematics at Indiana University is interesting. The writer seems to channel the professor’s excitement about the topics he teaches. Its highly descriptive but it doesn’t use any other sources than the person being profiled and the observations of the writer.
The lede is a quote, which is something used more in magazine writing than news writing at least according to the course assignments of those classes. It’s an engaging hook, though. It also sets the mood for the rest of the story.
The article starts discussing Rubenstein and then the second half seems more like a tangent that went out of control. The rest of the article discusses eyeglasses and he is quoted about his opinion on the school of optometry. It seems odd with all the topics he has studied that eyeglasses would become a primary concentration.
There are a few spots that may need some smoothing out. There is no transition from Rubenstein’s introduction to the discussion of glasses. It’s a bit like hitting a wall.
Most of the piece is engaging and interesting. It’s an idea few people consider, the real effect of applied mathematics. The parts that might have been the most interesting were not discussed. The parts that are discussed are interesting, but with so much going on, it would be interesting to find out how many different ways this article could have been written.
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